Monday, March 11, 2013

story

It was a nice morning, the sun was shining the birds were singing, suddenly a bomb exploded. Mike jumped up from his sleeping bag and looked around the corner of the little cave he had found yesterday. There was a large cloud of smoke rising from the east. Mike went back in the cave and started to gather his gear together, he then looked at his map
and thought of which route he should take. Then another explosion went off and startled him again but this time he just ignored it. “Probably just bandits” Mike said, “I really don't want to run into them today, i'm running low on ammunition”. He gathered up the rest of his stuff and left the cave making sure nothing had been left behind and headed west away from the smoke cloud. It was about 12:00 pm when he left and he still has not run into any place worthy of scavenging and now his food supply is low. As he was walking he heard a faint noise of a stream or at least he hoped it was, he followed the noise step after step it grew louder and the more excited he finally got there and it was real a fresh stream and it even had fish. He wanted to set up his stuff here and spend the rest of the day taking everything that was here but feared that there could be bandits on the same trail by now. But after an hour of studying the area he found a little ditch in the ground wide enough to sleep where nobody could see him. After that he spent the rest of the day gathering water and catching fish. It was now about 5:00 pm and it was getting dark, even though Mike only made out with 6 fish he still thought he did good, he put his gear and food away and went to bed.

3 comments:

  1. 1. the conflict is a bomb exploded so he went to sleep in a hole
    2. the main character went from sleeping in caves to sleeping in holes
    3my favorate part was when the birds where singing and then a bomb exploded
    4 my the bset quality is that it is short
    5 that you can survive by sleeping in holes
    6he needs to reviese the leanth so that it has enough words and more story too it

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  2. 1.) so bombs? not so good I guess. how are bombs get there? O.o
    2.) there are no changes...
    3.) I liked the beginning where all peaceful and then Boom! bombs :)

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  3. 1. Random explotions
    2.no changes
    3.I liked the..... randomness
    4.it was short and easy to read
    5.The theme is never pointed out
    6.you should write more I want to know what happened with the bandits

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